The mood that I was trying to set was supposed to be a kind of funny and friendly mood. I think that overall, I succeeded on trying to make that connection. For example in one clip, I filmed one of my close friends Raf with all of my friends's bags and made him walk through the pod, which resulted in him dropping all of our bags in the end for a funny ending for my clip. I also filmed my brother waving to me when I walked in. He had a funny smirk on his face so I had to put that into my visual poem.
In conclusion, I would say yes, I am pretty satisfied with my work. That one unnecessary clip of me playing video games makes me pretty mad that I couldn't get better B-Roll for that, but besides that, I think that I did a pretty good job, and I'm proud of myself.
You had good visuals to match your audio.
ReplyDeleteThe music was a bit loud...
The words had good flow to them and rhyming didn't seem forced.
You had a good poem/rap.
ReplyDeleteI think you could've made the audio not boom out my eardrums.
I liked your B-Roll, especially the part where I hurt my leg.
I really liked your rhyme schemes! Maybe next time you could lower the volume of your background music, it was kinda loud and made it hard to hear what your were saying. Nice text layovers though!
ReplyDeleteYour poem was read very clearly. One critique would have to be that the music is over powering and I think the audio should've been turned down. Lastly the sequencing was beautiful.
ReplyDeleteHiya Kiara! I love that neat rhyme with "park" and "Maya Clark". That was amazing rhyming skills. I would lower down the music volume because sometimes the music would overpower your voice. Either way, your B-Roll really related to your video and I loved that ending with the eye opening.
ReplyDeleteAwesome work Kiara and keep it up!
I really loved the emotion you could hear in your voice, and I love how you have subtle humor in your B-Roll clips. One thing that could be improved upon is the lighting, as I noticed a few shots were a bit dark and hard to see. Although the music was a bit loud, I think that it really matched the poem, and you could still hear it, so it wasn't that big of a deal. Awesome work!
ReplyDeleteThis was a really good video probably the best one I seen yet so far. But i would also turn down the music down.
ReplyDeleteI think that this video was pretty long which is kinda good
ReplyDeleteThe music volume could've been turned down so we can hear what you're saying
but this story is well made :)
I really like the subject you chose to use as you poem. Something you could of worked on would be to turn down the music in the background. But other than that , Great Job!
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ReplyDeleteVery good rhyming poem and music.
ReplyDeleteMusic was loud and voice was quiet.
B-role matched poem and was clear.
Good job, I like how you got shots at a lot of different places. The music was a little loud in some places. Your voiceover was very clear.
ReplyDeleteThat was great but it got quieter as it went. The visuals were relevent and the poem was very goood, but it could have been louder or the music softer.
ReplyDeleteI really liked the footage that you put into your visual poem.
ReplyDeleteThe background music was a great touch, but after a while the music got a little too loud.
The ending was perfect as if you were back to the beginning, starting all over.
I liked how well your visuals matched your poem. Your music overcame your voce, so it was kinda hard to hear your poem. I enjoyed how you made a poem about something that is natural to you and you do daily.
ReplyDeleteI like how the end kind of goes back to the beginning of the poem.
ReplyDeleteSome of the shots were a little dark and were kinda hard to see.
I liked how the shots matched the words nicely.
Your visuals matched what your poem was saying. The music at the end got a little loud and it made it hard to hear your poem. I enjoyed your overall poem with how it was about what you do on a daily basis.
ReplyDelete1.) I really liked the overall message of your poem and your b-roll.
ReplyDelete2.) I believe you could have lowered the music and also have more emotion in your voice.
3.) I enjoyed your poem and it's many b-roll shots.. great job!
I liked how you spoke clearly. I think that you could've lowered the audio levels. Your visuals were well shot.
ReplyDeleteNice job Kiara!
ReplyDeleteFrom what I noticed, the music could be lowered slightly so it could match the poem.
But overall, an awesome Poem!
(Cough Cough The Awesomeness Of Video Games Cough Cough)
I enjoyed the overall poem; there were a lot of visual poems with Rafael.
ReplyDeleteThe music was a bit loud.
The poem went along with everything really well.
I really like the background music. But the music was a little to loud and made it hard to listen to the poem. The B-roll shots were good and funny.
ReplyDeleteI love how this story is strictly about your day and what you do during your every day life. What you could have done to make it better is lower down your music. Your b-roll is awesome! I love how they just act so natural around the camera, thats kind of hard to get. Love your story keep it up!
ReplyDeleteI liked how you made the visuals match the poem and added a text layover. I think tat you could've lowered the volume on the background music because it was too loud and I couldn't hear what the voiceover was saying. I also liked how you took the time to film after school with the help of some friends
ReplyDeleteI liked how the B-roll matched you're voiceover. The background music was a little loud i could not really here you're voice over. The B-roll really good for the visual poem.
ReplyDeletegreat poem, could have turned the music volume down but overall great video!
ReplyDeleteGreat job Kiara.
ReplyDeleteI think if you put special effects on the darker visuals to make the exposer lighter it would have been easier to see. Also if you could lower your music, it would make it more understandable to the viewer on what you are say.
Great job! Even without the special effects, it was still Great!